Health Care Provider and Faith Diversity Peer Review

The flow of the paper is fair, but there are some areas that make it difficult for the reader to understand. The author uses titles and subtitles to move from one point to the nest making the paper have a clear flow and direction. Besides, there are many lexical, spelling and grammar errors that interrupt the flow of the paper. For example, in the sentence, “Catholics believed that God created the heaven and earth and there is not created without God’s knowledge…” the author made a mistake and mentioned that “there is not created” instead of “there is nothing created”. Also, the author confuses some words. For instance, in the sentence, “Buddha never claimed to be God but a man of taught, enlightenment and teaches…” he confuses the word “thought” for “taught”. Similarly, the author seems to be confused by the use of the words “believe” and “believes” and also the words “Buddha” and “Buddhists” are used interchangeably. For example, the writer says “Buddha believes” instead of “Buddhists believe.” The author could improve the flow of the paper by using correct grammar and sentence structure.

The author organized the paper in a good way; he made it clear using titles and headings and moved systematically from one aspect to another. It is commendable that he explains the two religions of Christianity and Buddhism briefly and then proceeds to compare different aspects of the two religions in the following sections. The second last sections talk about the importance of patient’s faith when cared for by a caregiver from a different faith. However, the paper could have been organized in a different way as it is offered by certain. The author could have spent fewer efforts in describing the two religions in the first and second sections after the introduction paragraph. Instead, he would have focused on giving comparisons between the two religions then proceed to explain some differences and how it could affect caregivers and patients from different faiths.

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